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Page 4 for The Sparrow. I will probably tweek it a little, like the word balloons in panel 1. but for all intensive purposes it is done. Yay. Feedback always appreciated!!!

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  • Face. Face. Face. Face. The boy's face really needs to be defined. I like what you're doing. The perspective is cool - but the size of the girl compared to the boy as they fly off is a little extreme - he should be a little bit bigger/closer to us. I understand the attempt at showing us distance - but the size established in the previous panel looks off compared with the next panel - it looks like he shrunk.

    Colors - I think you can make your colors have stronger contrasts - the mountains are blending into the trees. In the top panel on the left monster in front blends into the monster behind - which in turn blends into the background.

    BUT again, exciting pacing, and good storytelling. You've nailed the girl down very well. Keep playing and being inventive -it's the only way to grow. Keep it up.

    Martin

  • Wow, this is amazing and you are cranking them out pretty quickly. It looks like you are having a lot of fun with this. I love the composition here as well, in both panels. Keep up the great work!

  • Thanks Sven and Gerry. Yeah, the sky was fun to do, glad you liked it Gerry! I was tired of doing the forest hehe. Pages 5,6, and 7 should be pretty fast to complete because they are all action, not a lot of scenery to worry about. Page 8 we start to get into the heart of the story.

  • Yeah perspective is awesome. 

  • Great perspective on the two kids in the lower panel! And that sky is perfect:)

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